Once in the opening paragraph, "AED is known for its guest speakers and the shadow opportunities it offers its members year-round." And once in the concluding paragraph; AED stands out from the rest of the pre-health organizations at the University of Miami by the variety of professional speakers brought in by the e-committee, the shadow opportunities provided to members, and the fact that it looks good on a membership application medical faculty. Incorporating these quotes was necessary, but I was able to reduce repetition while still getting the point across. Those quotes also helped me improve another weakness of mine by clearly stating my thesis. In the first two drafts, I begin by introducing my discursive community and how it fits into Swales's six characteristics that define a discursive community. I reduced the number of repetitions by only putting the main idea once in my introduction and once in my own